I’m writing a revenge story. This guy or girl comes from a rich family. Their dad is a doctor and their mom is a lawyer. The kid is in their 20s and is a drug addict. Their family cut them off because of it.
The dealer kills them because they couldn’t pay the money they owed. Then a loved one goes after the dealer for revenge.
Is this good? I didn’t want to overcomplicate it by giving it a huge conspiracy, but at the same time, realistically, couldn’t they have gotten the money some other way?
This story makes no sense. Why would a dealer front merchandise? The only time that ever happens in real life is if the dealer is male, the buyer is female, and they find the dealer finds them attractive. But that’s rare because both dealers and customers are usually male.
Also, which drugs?
Lastly, it’s extremely unlikely that a low-level dealer is going to seek “revenge” on a customer. They’re usually not gang members; just regular everyday people like you and me who are desperate to make some extra cash. If a customer screws you, you cut your losses and refuse to sell to them anymore. After all, you’re running an illegal business. Laying low is going to be your #1 priority; last thing you’re going to do is get the police’s attention with a revenge plot.
You need to spend more time in the real world before you write a story about things that happen out there.